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God damn! Brilliant piece you got here. That entire scene played out like detailed move in my mind. As The Chronicler said, "that ending gave me whiplash!". Entirely shocking twist. But hey, now Ray has a reason to be in a bad mood.

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Thank Jeff, I appreciate it. It played out like a movie scene in my own head, and I'm glad it translated as such.

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The dialogue in this was second to none, unbelievable!

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Thank you very much! I always strive to make dialogue as enjoyable as possible, so that's very high praise.

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Of course! Dialogue is one of my weak points, so reading this was almost like a workshop for me in how to do better!

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That ending gave me whiplash! Great character-driven story with a ton of amazing detail. I cannot wait for the next installment.

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Thank you for the kind words. If the ending took you off guard, then I achieved what I set out to do.

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I’m just a reader and the dismissal, surprising for sure, only put the hook in. What’s next is the dominant question and I’m very much looking forward to it.

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